No, That’s Not It

No, That’s Not It

Before i met you
Life was dull
(At least I think so,
Because I can’t
REALLY remember)
Everyone just wanted to pull
Pull me away, away from my goal
(Of what? Being dull?)
I would say, thats fine
Then i would step out of line
(Because it’s an easy rhyme)
People didnt understand
I was a person, not a ham
(Which I guess I don’t
Quite enjoy being meat,
But why not? Ham is tasty)
It seemed back then
People wanted a piece
(Wait for it)
A piece of that ham
(Ham doesn’t even really
Rhyme with understand)

My so-called friends
(So, none at all)
Wanted to use me
(Who wants to use someone
With a dull life?)
Push the buttons
That im used too
I wouldnt stop
Living for the future
Nowadays
Im in the moment
(How heroic)

In the sea of meleancholy
(Because I listened to that
Song by the Gorillaz
And got angsty)
I lost my way
(To dullness)
My compass had been dropped
Smashed to bits upon a rock
(Okay, that’s actually
A pretty good two lines)
I would drift
Drift away
Through another
shapeless day
(Truly dull)

Everything looked the same
Up and down were such a pain
(Maybe if you didn’t endure
So much dullness you’d be better)
Dont ask me about left or right
They were always out of sight
(Wow)

I was lost at sea
Needed a sanctuary
(Maybe this is okay)
I was alone
And afraid
In uncharted, territory
(Why is there a comma
There?)

Before i met you
I doubted that souls existed
(Oh, boy. Here we go)
Then we touched for the first time
And ours instantly connected
(God dammit)
The feeling was intense
I wanted to rip away
But you held on and said,
Everything will be okay
(Seriously? Away/okay?
3/10 try again)

Theres a difference
Between a scratch
And a crack
A scratch skims the surface
Barely a touch
A crack reaches
Reaches down to the core
And deals some damage
In its wake
(Why damage? Wasn’t this
Just about souls? Do souls
Damage things?)

It was not as easy as i thought
I would drop in
And just say hi
(About the extent of the
Relationship, yeah)
Now i find it difficult
Saying goodbye
Telling me, to watch the skies
(For what?)

An angel from said sky
(God dammit)
Came down and asked me why
Why was I so satisfied
With my lonely way of life
(Dull? And again, 3/10
For the rhyming words)
She took me with her
Back to the sky
(Actually not a bad
Couplet by itself)

For the first time
I was in Rapture
(Because things weren’t
Dull, presumably)
I felt like the richest
Man alive
(Cliche, 1/10 try again)
You were the best thing ever
And you were the only
One of a kind
(Everyone is one
Of a kind)

The moon couldnt compare
To the colors you dont share
(Oh god why)
The moon is but black and white
While you are everything
and more
(Not really. And nice
Inconsistent punctuation)

You were there when I was not
Made me feel at home a lot
(Why did you feel the need
To force the rhymes?)
The times we had were the best
It was my first non-hate-fest
(What the hell… is a
non-hate-fest?)

Then you left
You warned me you would
Now im left
(The apostrophe moved out)
On needles filled with hope
They wont last me
Last me a while
(Drug references, really?
How edgy!)
Until im rendered
Unaccessabile
(Pretty sure that’s not
How you spell that)

The impact was too great
It had caused a massive quake
(Outside of this poem, this
Above couplet is okay)
Like being hit with a comet
With a beautiful melody
Trailing behind it
(There’s where we get the
Title: Night’s Melody)

Since i heard that tune
Ive been listening to it
on my zune
(No way)
It sounds like lightning
Striking the earth
Maybe ive been listening a little
A little too much
(The repitition here only
REINFORCES THE ANGST)

My emotions are ascew
(Go figure)
Being tended to
By a crew
A one man army
Being cruel
(Above quatrain isn’t bad)
I used to think
That it was cool

Your aura has long been gone
But what we had is now a song
The melody I sing day to day
(Could be nice if it weren’t
In this poem)
Is definately worth crying over
By the way
(Oh god, why did you have to
Go and write that?)

The hole in my heart,
Cannot be replaced,
(Kicking into high gear)
Because your face
Will keep its place
No one else
Can make that claim
(I’m sure)
If thats bad
Then thats a shame
(What is the point of
Those two lines?)

It feels like simple science
Two things are attracted
(Is this real?)
If im right
You paid attention during physics
Studied up, on all the quizzes
(Actually kind of like this)
But i know
Thats not my buisiness
(Why not?!)

I look at the Moon
And maybe think
You are too
(What? “Not my business”?)
If I were there
What would I do
(No question mark)
I would spend every moment
With you
(Of course you would)

Even on the coldest night
I wouldnt put up
The slightest fight
I would sink into the light
Let it wrap me within its might
(Is this about the subject
Or…?”

In this world, you are the one
(Yeah? Chrissakes)
When you left
It was not just a shove
More like a bullet,
Made for love
(MAXIMUM OVERANGST)
the wounds Were deep
And there are no
No drugs for love
(Except for the onces referenced
Earlier)

I feel like im bleeding
Feeling the feeling
Being ripped away
With no vaccine to cure this
(Actually kind of good,
Surprisingly)
Try and lead me,
toward the day
When I can show you
Show you my way
(Of dullness?)

The vaccine for me
Is for you to be
Right here, right now
(I thought there was
No vaccine. And why do you
Keep using that word?)
My hope is nearly gone
I swear I would have asked you
To go to prom
(How… pathetic? That’s not
The right word)

I lay awake at night
Trying to find a light
The light at the end
Of this tunnel
(Of being a boring sod?)
This tunnel seems
To go on forever
Making it impossible
To keep on going
Through the night
I have to do it
Do it right
(Be dull?)

All My friends tell me
That I should move on
(They’re right)
Forget about just who you are
But I cant do that so easy
I love you too much
(Never even said it in person)
And thats a fact,
but I know
you already knew that
(No, not really)

I can hear the morning birds now
Singing the melody I did long ago
Maybe now it’s time to awake
But i dont think I went to sleep
(So… huh? That’s confusing)

Nostalgia’s never gone
(Uh huh)
It seems like you are always on
(Uh huh)
Watching me from tomarrow
(Misspelled, but uh huh, and
I like the idea of self-reflection)
As I drag on in sorrow
(Oh, Christ…)

Nothing can come close
to you and I
(I bet)
Im watching others
Come and try
(No you’re not)
What we had was special
(DELETE)
Nobody else can fulfill
What you were to me
No one can
No one ever will
(PURGE)

You are my Night’s Melody
(Good title drop)
Greater than Da Vinci’s art
(Not good line)
A winged angel, just for me
(Oh boy…)
The fire buring, in my heart
(God dammit)

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